Birthday Poem

Hi - I love my job. I wake up every day to feedback like this:

Morning Allen,

As you had done poems for me before I knew it would be wonderful but I am blown away by this. Your amazing! I didnt think you could capture every thing that I wanted to say but you have and its wonderful. Thank you again I cant wait to give it to him.

Just a couple of changes, I have put them below in red. Tell me what you think….happy for your suggestions, you are the expert!

Could I just have an email copy of this? Don’t worry about printing it on paper. Oh and no objections to you publishing it on your website.

Thanks
Shiree

Get the full story about this birthday poem here:

http://www.agiftofpoetry.com/2007/08/13/birthday-poem-the-promising-dockers/

Wedding Poem From Mother To Daughter

Hi - It is peak wedding season so I am writing a lot of wedding poems at the moment. This feedback was recieved after the first draft of "A Mother's Love For Her Daughter". I am not going to share the whole wedding poem until after the wedding but this was the feedback I received, word for word…


"Hi Allen, Thank you so very much, it made me cry, so I don’t know what I am going to be like at the wedding.

I have changed a few things (I feel awful for doing so as it is so beautiful) and put in my words on how I would say it. I have changed it in RED
Allen I know it’s all over the place, I hope you will fix (I know you will be able to do so). Thanks again, be in touch soon. Warm Regards, Moya"

Wedding Poem From Friend To 'Sister'

Hi - I am not going to share the whole wedding poem until after the wedding but I have just written 'Wee Sister' and this was the feedback I received after the first draft…

"Dear Allen its great. I am in floods of tears. Angela left today so your timing is great. Only a few changes i think.Could you take out the word little e.g my wee little sister and just say wee sister? In verse 8 could you remove the My God as we are christians and wouldn't say that? And finally the last verse could you say something about blessing them and remove the bit about the bed? Sorry hope this is not too picky. Thanks again.Catriona"